Improvments

After the presentation of our first cut, it became clear to me the quality of our work was not up to standard and definitely not up to par with the rest of the class, however unsettling this was that we had a lot of work to do, I feel like it gave us perspective and a wiser knowledge of what to do next, and of course we had feed back to dwell on as well. I also felt Dan agreed with this and as a team we have seen the following corrections need to be made: 

• Much more context into the film and giving more depth and reason into each shot. We found on watching everyone’s reactions and reading their feedback, they were just confused and couldn't follow the story line. For example the representation of the static and the meaning behind it wasn't put across, and I think the biggest thing I have taken away from the presentation is that you can just expect people to accurately grasp the concept of your ideas, you have to show them pretty much in layman’s terms for your point to be put across. 
• Our music choice was poor, which we knew anyway, but everyone else agreed, and Dan also pointed out it looked like a music video more than a film opening, so we have scrapped the Amanda Seyfreid song, and are unsure of what to do next, as I think we should carry on the pursuit for a track but Dan thinks we should scrap the music and go for ambient sound, which I do think is an option but I feel when there is dialogue and sound effects added the music will seem more in place. 
• The church shots were shit, nothing more can be said on the matter the shots need to be scrapped and a new idea must be made to fill the time. 
• There was one shot were the shot was shaken which needs to be cut short and the static times were not even in timing, showing we should possibly revise the editing to make it pristine. 
• The titles and the bar sequence was good and the audience said they though it looked professional and was a good idea/way of doing it. 
• Mrs Allison pointed out a few tweaks such as the 'starring Paige Law' title, she said we should possibly hold it back and use it when you first see her face.